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What is your opinion?
Great writing !!
"So far this story has action it goes into to the the characters as in to describing them plus towards the end it was getting emotional this author makes the story come alive great writing!!"
Room to improve
"The story has great potential and if edited and expanded I believe this could develop into an enjoyable novel. You will need to edit and then re-edit as there are typing errors, and the story needs to be built upon. The Plot is a bit disjointed and requires rethinking, that said for a First Draft this has great potential and could develop into a great read. Please keep writing."
