A star is rising

"I'm definitely not into romance, I checked out your story out of curiosity and for learning purposes. All I can say is that it's a solid work so far. You've established a mistery in the beginning which is very good and then you are throwing your main character into more conflict, both physical and emotional which is also great. I like how you can play with words, you've written some really nice/catchy sentences but not overly complicated or over embellished. This is for sure a strong point for you. It was also nice how you've interwoven the details, like the introduction of character names and places with the action. You didn't just state them plainly which might have been boring. At first I thought that Ocean was a cat :)). The dialogue flows nicely and seems natural. The only thing I can identify as a minor problem, is the punctuation. I think that your comma usage is a little lacking both in normal sentences and in dialogues. These thing can be corrected easily with a beta reader software like Grammarly or Language Tool (use one because you'd be surprised about how many mistakes the eyes can't catch, I know it from experience). You can also google it up, there are only a few simple rules. These tools will also help you catch words with typo's. You have a few of them as well. Only minor stuff and I suppose mostly unintentional. So far, the story is great, even for a die hard horror fan like me. Keep working!"