Awesome Story!

"Great story, really interesting! One trouble was pronouncing some of the names as they were foreign, but that's alright! Grammar is nice, punctuation is good. Some more sensory detail would do too, I'm a little unaware where this story is taking place, like what it looks like. Other than that, great story! Love the back story before too! I would recommend this to people who love comedy as this story was really funny and real life problems as the characters have those too! Great job, keep up the great work!"