Intriguing and different

"I like the plot, it is intriguing. The pov shifts are quite nicely done, though a lot of things are told to readers, which may have worked as something to grasp from the development (for instance, it was clear, that Iris was born as a result of a deal with Lucifer, but it was told to us still). It's interesting work and hopefully it will continue. There are some places where grammar needs correcting, I was not reading online, so I couldn't comment on specific paragraphs, but I remember several- there was first paragraph in scene of Hawaii and also the lunch party had "three us" missing "of" and some more. Nothing major, copyediting can fix it. Keep up! You have a talent 🥰"