A Good Start

"First, the summary seems incomplete, like there's a word missing. Else than that, it's good. This is a good start. I'm curious as to how Nites will play a part in the future, among other things. I find the introductions and relationships interesting, but some of them are told to us rather than shown. For example, the narrator, Jay, tells us about Damien and Gabriel being close, when we could see that more through their own actions. Not to say Jay can't make a comment about it, but just something to think about. Some parts are repetitive, so take another look over it to keep the pace flowing well."