What is your opinion?
Blackwood
"Even though some of the outcomes were expected, the story had a soul like thing that portrays difficult situations. You gave the characters a personality"
Good!
"I wonder what happened to Ava! I imagine it'll probably come out in the next few chapters. The pacing was good, not too quick and not too slow. One thing I would look at is the telling at the beginning of chapter 1. You do tell us quite a lot of background information about Ava and some bits about her uncle. I think it would be better if you started straight into the immediate moment and let those bits come out through the dialogue. I would also have a closer look at punctuation with commas and fullstops in places. Sometimes they're missing or a comma is used instead of a fullstop. And finally, I would also check that you are using present at all times in the immediate moment (except for referring to events prior to the story), as there are a few thatslip into past. But overall a very good start! Keep it up :)"
