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"I read the first book (BURSTING of the FLOWER) and loved it so much, I must say, that this is one kind of story that portrays a strong-willed woman, who never gave up no matter what. But, I would like to advise you on re-editing as, there is a lot of grammatical errors, especially the punctuation, for example when quoting a character's speech, like: "I loved you" "you were everything to me" It's just wrong separating them into two different quotation, especially when it's the same person speaking and the same line. Try like; "I loved you," I started/said/began, "You were everything to me." Also, avoid switching the writer's point of view in the same chapter without indicating as it confuses the reader. Otherwise, great job. I simply love your book!"