Bellgang's opinion on your story

"I really like the story so far. I like the plot-line, I like the format. I really like it. But I think you should make a few changes to the story. A few of my suggestions are; 1. You should make the chapters longer 2. You should re-word the characters thoughts and actions 3. Add more details to the surroundings And I'm sorry if I offend you in any way. I'm not trying to, I'm just suggesting things for your story."