What is your opinion?
Lost Love
"This WIP is in great progress so far :) What the main character feels about his crush in chapter 1 is relatable and accurate to what people in real life feel, and the author's writing style helps create an image in the reader's mind which is great in a story. This is the start of what I think will be a great mystery novel. My only critique is what I believe is the typo "Ahe" in chapter 2 but overall it's great."
It's off to a good start!
"I enjoyed reading the couple of chapters you have written so far and although I haven't been able to discover loads about the story so far, I really do think it is off to a good start! However, I think there are a few things I think you can improve on: a better cover, because whilst the one you have got now stands out well, I think it would do better with maybe having a couple on the front or something that is a bit more interesting or intricate, however, that is totally your call. I recommend (as a writer who has been writing for seven years) making a mood board of all the covers you get inspiration from, whether it be on Google or Pinterest, and then you are able to make the perfect cover. Another thing is that I've noticed a couple of spelling mistakes including "fly's" instead of "flies", but everyone makes mistakes! You say you use grammarly, however, as a somewhat experienced writer, I feel that you should reread your chapters thoroughly, but ultimately, mistakes will be made which is fine! That's why beta readers are so good! One more thing is that in the second chapter, there was a section of dialogue which was rather confusing to read between the boy and the girl as it was all in one paragraph. When writing, it is always better to seperate the speech and dialogue so it is a lot easier to read. One final note is that I would love to have a lot more description of the characters and the setting, which will also help to lengthen your chapters and help the reader to be put in the scene because I'm struggling to picture it and the characters. I hope this makes sense. Over all though, I think you have good potential"
