What is your opinion?
Hindsight
"Am enjoying it so far would like to carry on t Reading"
One Worth Watching—and I don't say that often!
"So "Hindsight" is a paranormal mystery that centers around a college girl getting caught up in a serial murder case by a very persistent ghost who will NOT take "no" for an answer. It's a story that's incomplete, but definitely worth following as it's a step above your "usual" online fare: + Interesting characters within a few paragraphs' worth of interactions. (I bargain for singing rights, too, though they're mostly limited to my car trips anymore.) + The foundational premise was set quickly and deftly, allowing me to understand the relevance of central events even within Chapter One without belaboring the point. (e.g., the glasses breaking) + Solid pacing and plot construction—I knew where we were going, but still wanted to get there. + Natural conversations that are entertaining, engaging, and manage to "dump" some exposition without feeling bulky. The reason I didn't give this text a full 5 stars is that because for all its promise, it's got some (nebulous) work to do before I'd consider it to be "complete," even with the two chapters that are out. The sentences could use some tightening and pizazz, a few of the expository paragraphs could be tweaked for better flow, a snappier hook/summary for readers—these things would polish & perfect an already damn-good product. Grab a solid beta reader and have them articulate these gut-feelings I've got from a brief reading. I'm also feeling a little like I've read this story before. (Meg Cabot's Mediator series springs to mind.) That doesn't meant this story isn't fabulous; I'd just hoped for something a little bit different from the "Girl sees ghosts and doesn't want to but is occasionally forced to help out and look she's now in trouble because of it!" sort of pattern. Again, that's not *bad*, per se, but just something worth noting. I'll be looking forward to see where this story goes from here."
