Rich with power

"Just finished reading your Awoken Magic. I guess this is a draft - so you obviously need to develop your plot further. Your writing style is rich with colors, flowing colors - elegant and thought-provoking which many writers lack. If you don't mind I can suggest some further improvements :D Like, the telepathy power of Isabella. How about making it limited to some grounds like - she can't use her telepathy powers during night? It will help adding more conflicts to your story for a bit negative renovation doesn't hurt :) And lastly, revise your dialogues. Like specially Isabella's first speech to our main character. How about making "You are not alone" instead of "I am not alone"? I understand why you have used it, but this one could enhance better understanding between you and your reader. Well, these are just my suggestions. You may have better ideas. I hope - that you bloom to become a finer writer day by day! Looking forward to read your new inputs. Yours, Tanya."