Chapter 1
First, let’s introduce my self a little bit. I am a novel writer from Thailand that would like to write some novel in a foreign language. English is not my native language, and I am not that familiar with the English novel writing style.
Below is the first chapter of the translated version of my novel that I write in Thai before.
I am not sure about the format that using here, so I apologize beforehand if I did something inappropriate here.
Please give me some advice regarding the chapter I post below.
I would like to expand the opportunity and find the possibility in the future.
Thank you
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Sri Lanka 2006
Tamil’s Tiger ruling area. Unknown location.
Currently, the fighting between Tamil’s tiger and Sri Lanka becoming fiercer than ever. However, the one who is losing is the tiger itself. A man who takes responsibility in Tamil’s army is worry about the situation and waiting for the solution that can help them turn the table. Sound of helicopter is approaching him with the said solution. In that helicopter, hold the hope of Tamil’s army.
Tamil’s General looks up at the Blackhawk that has no identity with hope and anxiety. The black machine slowly landing on the simple concrete platform before the American with dark skin walking out with an armed soldier. He wore a greenish soldier uniform, which makes him look more intimidated with his big body. His black eye looking around to find the one he makes an appointment with. Beside him is a white young man that grown tall more than average children at his age. He has a blue eye and wears a greenish uniform like other soldiers.
“General Carter!” The Tamil’s general went out and greet his guest
“And you are the one that responsible for this site, correct?” Carter reply
“Yes, that me. You guys are travel so far. Do you want some rest first?” He asks to give them hospitality, but Carter does not agree.
“We do not need it. This meeting is classified. We need to finish the job as quickly as we could,” Carter replied with tone-deaf. “Where is it?” The guy who offers them hospitality doesn’t like those answer but he priority the job nevertheless.
“This way, sir.”
Their destination is the construction site of Tamil’s army. They are preparing an area for their troop, so the place is full of temporary camp and construction tools. And not far from site lie down victim of war, children, women, elder no one can escape from this cruelty of war. Some of Tamil soldiers moan for their lost one, avert their eye to Carter in the hope that he could help them exact vengeance.
However, Carter didn’t care about their feeling. The only thing in his mind right now is a big gaping hole in front of him. The breach is caused by the bomber plane of Sri Lanka’s army and will not be anything special if not because of the Black cube that lay down in the center of that hole. The perfectly square small cube stone give off the black light that impossible to exist by the mean of our science.
“We found it after the Sri Lanka air raid we don’t know what it is but the blast from bomb couldn’t even scratch it,” The Tamil’s general said “We have no idea what it is, and our soldier are a superstitious bunch, so everyone denies to do something with it.”
“You already erase all media you have about it?” Carter asks
“Yes, we did. But the one that we upload on the internet still…”
“That’s not a problem. We already take care of those. We make it seem like you use CGI to create those media. We even hire some internet influencers to make the story up.”
After he replies, Carter calls his soldier to take care of that black cube. The middle-age general feel relieves that he finally found this black cube after years of searching just because some of Tamil’s soldiers upload the footage to the internet. This is the hope of him and his fellow Asura; however, at the same time, he feels anxiety because this discovers it can also mean the end of mankind too.
“What about our deal.”
“You will get what you want. Money already transfers directly to your leader. You can buy tanks, planes, guns whatever you want. This war is not our business” Tamil general feels relieved after hearing that and after the confirmation from his leader, his eye light up with hope. He hopes that this fund will bring victory to Tamil’s army.
“I wish we can do the business again in the future general Carter” Carter didn’t reply to him. The middle-aged man just shakes hand with his temporary partner and hurry his way to the helicopter.
The sound of gunfire goes on without warning in the moment of relieve. The head of the soldier who carries a suitcase blown up immediately causes the briefcase that has The Black cube inside to fall to the ground.
“Enemy attack!” The Tamil’s soldier sounds the alarm. Most of them think that this is the attack from Sri Lanka’s army.
“This is not from Sri Lanka. Their foot soldier could not come this far” General Carter said in the middle of gunfire
“Of cause not. I can feel it. They are Deva, and the Deva armor’s user is also here” The young lad who keep quiet up to this time said to general Carter
“Can you tell who is that Kelvin?” Kelvin shake his head
“I never face this Deva armor’s user before. I can only tell that he is powerful. You should start to run now, General.”
“We should not waste our time, let’s get back to the bird!”
Carter shouts out his order and Kelvin then jump to the suitcase and use handcuffs to make sure the package will not fall from his left hand. In his right hand, hold the SMG that he uses to lay down suppression to the enemy in the forest while trying to reach the helicopter. But before they can enter the aircraft, the pure white light is piece through their escape route.
“General, get behind me!”
After the shout from Kelvin, the pure white light is exploding destroy helicopter and everything around its target. Everyone there thinks that Carter and Kelvin are already KIA, but behind the scene of destruction, Carter is still standing with some minor injury, and in front of him is the black figure that no one ever seen in their lifetime.
It looks like a human in armor. Its slant eye gives off green light that comes from within armor. Its armor looks like something that comes from hell itself. It has spikes on the shoulder and its back. The helmet has a single horn extrude from its forehead. And they have some kind of energy running through all its body give off green light line.
“Kelvin, grab the package and run!” General Carter speaks to that armor. He doesn’t care about his own safety. The only thing he cares about is Kelvin, who is Asura armor’s user and that Black cube.
“Situation is changed, the enemy has a long-range attack. Any escape route is sealed off until we can defeat him” He answers through his armor make his sound seem stronger than usual.
The arrow of light is piece through the forest again, but this time Kelvin is ready for it. He uses his broad ax to counter it immediately cause the explosion in front of him.
“If we can kill him, this fight will be over in an instant.”
“Wait, Kelvin!”
General Carter could not stop the hot blood young one. Kelvin runs through the forest with superhuman strength while using his ax to repel the attack from the enemy. And when he reaches the other side of the woods. He then spots his opponent.
However, what he calls the opponent is just a ball of light that gives off the shape of a human. He couldn’t see his opponent well because of the light that comes from that white armor. However, he sure in one thing. His opponent using long-range weapons, and in the melee range, he can take him down.
With that quick decision, he lunches his body to close the gap with his opponent. The arrow of light shoots straight to Kelvin’s head in an attempt to take him down before he can reach the melee range, but the black armor is nimble enough to evade it and swing his ax with full strength.
The sound of steel clashing with steel echo through the battlefield. Kelvin is in shock when he can blurry see that other than the bow, his opponent can somehow use dual sword at the same time. When they are still in the melee range, the ray of light is shining from the white figure again, sounding the alarm in Kelvin’s head force him to drop his ax just to evade that devastating arrow.
The arrow misses its target again. Kelvin back off a little bit before calling his ax to fly back to his hand.
“What do we have here. A tricky bastard, perhaps?” He talks with his opponent a bit while circle around, trying to figure out the situation. “Why not reveal yourself by turning off that stupid light? Coward.”
“It just that you are not qualified to be able to see the true me” Armor of light answer back with arrogant old man sound. Ticking off Kelvin even more.
“Fuck off. You are not different than me. We just on the opposite side.”
Kelvin starts his onslaught again by consecutively swing his ax without any sight of tired. Each swing packs a power that destroys everything in its path, forcing his enemy to use hit and run tactics.
“You are so strong young one. That is why you almost got me one thousand years ago.”
That phrase makes him remember something unpleasant. He instinctively jump back immediately. What his opponent said and the weapon his opponent using is revealed to him his opponent, or should he say his opponent Asura’s armor name.
“look like you realize it now…” In an instant that Kelvin is hesitating, his opponent rushing to him and slash him with four swords. “…The giant of virtue.”
Even though Kelvin can defend himself against those four swords, the power of the attack sends him to stumble away. Before he can do anything, the light figure releases the onslaught on him. Four swords confirming his assumption on his opponent’s identity. [You can’t win] Damn it! He speaks to himself, try to calm down. Try to deny the memories of Asura’s armor’s previous user. This fight will be his win no matter what.
“Give me the Asura’s core, and I will end everything” The old man try to negotiate him while not stopping the attack.
“Over my dead body!”
“Then so be it” The most potent attack from armor of light finally lands on Kelvin. The young man cries out in pain with his armor breaking apart. The blood rushes out from his chest and forehead but he not giving up. He sees a little opening and throws his ax to his target with full force send the light figure crumble to the ground.
This is the decisive blow! Kelvin thinks while rushing to deliver the finishing blow, but at that moment, the arrow of light is shot out from his opponent to his chest, sending him and the suitcase fly to the cliff. Because of the light that his opponent emitting made him unable to see the counter-attack. He clenches his teeth while his conscious fading away. And in the final moment, all he sees is the ocean and the Asura’s core that break free from the suitcase drawn into the deep sea.
“Are you alright, sir!” The soldier of Deva rushes out to see the winner of the battle. However, the winner didn’t get away unscratched.
“I am too old now just a little more, and I will be the goner” He replies while panting “you go look for the Asura’s core I will clean this place.”
“Yes, sir!”
After his soldier runs off, the light-emitting figure is float high and extend his four-hand to the side of his body. Immediately the enormous number of light arrows is appearing in the air around him aiming at Tamil’s base. The tiny human that has the rank of a general look at those like with the empty eye. Then before everything disappears, the phase he remembers in his childhood day slip out from his lip.
“Now I am become Death, the destroyer of worlds.”
And then everything is consumed by the light
Thailand 2017
Market near Thailand-Burma border
“Come on, everybody, come to see the real Leklai* The real deal that already given blessing from high-rank monk!” Merchant shout out to call his customer. In front of him are the metal amulet that lies within glass containers. Each one of them has a price tag of at least 50,000 baht. Around those, Leklai are talismans from Buddhist connecting each other with holy thread to make them look more magical.
Korn is one of the young men that believe in mythical stuff from Buddhist tradition. He also comes here looking to buy some of those Leklai. However, with him being just a college student, the price tag of at least 50,000 baht is something Korn could barely afford. If he pays that amount of money just for the tiny metal amulet, he will be in hell of pain after this. But the young man didn’t want to waste his time come along way to the border just to go back with bare hand. Korn decides to call out for a merchant, but at that moment, someone calls him before.
“Young one do you have a moment.”
Someone calls him with such a soothing sound, but somehow, the call is clearer even than the sound of the merchant. And when Korn turn looks back, he sees one old monk stand behind him with such a mercy smile. “Look like you are seeking the Leklai.”
The monk unfolds yellow cloth to reveal black cube rock that no bigger than his thump. It doesn’t give off any light, and it looks like an ordinary rock. Made the young man thing he is getting scam.
“Sir… look I”
“She wants to be with you young one, so I brought her to you. The rest is the matter of mortal. My duty is end here.” Korn confuse about what happening. He looks at the stone in his hand again, but this time it gives off the black light that he never seen before. The black light looks like it tries to consume everything. Beautiful and malice at the same time.
“Sir, this stone is!” But when he looked up, the monk is nowhere to be found. He gets the goosebumps. He felt that destiny bound him with that stone. He decides to put the rock into his pocket and hurry his way back to transport since he already got what he come to look for.
The black light of Asura’s core is gone one more time.
Waiting for the right moment to shine again.
And this time, it will consume The Deva’s light forever.
*Leklai (Liquid metal) is a mythical matter in Thailand. Said to have magical power imbue in it. Some even said that Leklai has the will and life of its own.
