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Awesome. Love fantasy.
"It's awesome, although I do love anything that has fantasy. But its still amazing, you continue doing what you're doing."
Like it
"Where is chapters 17 & 18 and 20 at "
Good plot
"Good premise There seems to be a lot of grammatical errors. Some expressions aren’t used correctly. There’s a lot more showing than telling which is good but try to make it more concise. Eg she entered her cubicle (no need to say it’s separated by walls). Instead of saying she nodded nervously you could say that she nodded like her life depended on it. The reader immediately understands this as fear, given the context of the situation. "
