What is your opinion?
This was awesome
"I absolutely loved this story so far. I've already fallen for the characters, (and having a younger brother myself, I can personally vouch that the sibling fighting is truthful). It has a really intriguing plot and good humor. Please write more!!"
The Knell: first chapters
"This is one of the best stories I've read till now. I don't understand why it hasn't more hearts, votes I mean. It's very exciting and humorous in the dialogues. You describe the main characters, Garrett, and Kaethe very well. I love the story so far and I surely will give it my vote already. Well done. Keep writing and I will follow this story. I'm also with a story on NaNoWriMo: 'The Woman in Red'. If you would return the favor I would be very honored. Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere"
That beginning though....
"I read the prologue and just loved it. It drew me in and had me engaged until the last. I love your portrayal of the character (the boy -- I don't know his name) and his thoughts and actions. The interaction between him and the executioner is very well done. I loved the flow of your writing. It was very smooth and interesting. Your comparisons were also very well done. This was really a great beginning. My complaint is that there was a lot of telling instead of showing. While I had a picture of what was going on, I didn't have any setting or description of character in mind besides that of the executioner. I think that a little more sensory details would have gone a long way. This was definitely a powerful start though, even without the sensory. The method of death was extremely interesting and unexpected. This is very well done. I would like to read more. Good work!"
Haileen
"It is wonderful. The plot is captivating, I only had to read the prologue to feel the need to read the rest. It is a really good story. I think people should at least take a look at the first chapter, if they like this time of things. I personally love the plot of a thief who stole a heart."
Prologue of "The Knell" (Nanowrimo)
"So I'm writing this review, keeping in mind that this is a work in progress and it's part of National Novel Writing Month (NaNoWriMo), so my "deeper" critiques will be saved until it's all finished up. Initial impressions: + Great place to start a story! Wow. Torturing to get information out of the male protagonist (who I assume is the man who turns the female protagonist's life upside down referenced in the snippet?). + The dialogue is a bit stilted yet, and the tone shifts from formal to informal ("Let this serve as a lesson..." to "Okay," for example) while speaking. Something to keep in mind as you continue. + Prologue certainly makes me curious to see where this goes, though I'm guessing the first chapter is going to be a bit slower compared to the prologue. + Female Protagonist really needs to shine, to be worthy of this sort of devotion. I hope she's not a Mary Sue. Good luck, and keep writing!"
