Stormshadow fanfiction

"I have always loved stormshadow, from the old TV show and the new movies. He's always been my favorite, and after seeing the way you've handled his character in the first three chapters, I'm not at all disappointed. Using his disappointment and resentment after taking away his dream is a brilliant way to get the reader's sympathy. His voice in the story, though very simple, is interesting and really gave me a look into his head. I can't tell where the story is going yet, but I am certainly enjoying it so far. I think that my favorite scene out of the first three chapters was his interaction with the female ninja guarding the vase. It was very unexpected, and I just love that. The reason that I marked this story down was because there is a devastating lack of description of any kind. After three chapters, I still have no picture in my mind of time, setting, or any of the characters. The protagonist's own past is still unclear. I think that if you delved deeper into the setting, it would illuminate the story a lot, and description also does a lot for character development. I LOVE ninjas. Always have. I'd like to know more about what their clan is like, how life is, where they live, what they live in. That sort of thing. It would really add to the story. Either way, I enjoyed this a lot and would definitely read more. It's very enjoyable and well done. I hope that you do well in the contest and get lots of readers. Great work!"