Just Normal
“Just Normal”
In a forest...
Two people (male and female) are holding hands (interlock fingers) on their chest while shaking and looking at the giant beast approaching them. The beast looks like a cyclops with long neck. The beast uproot the tree and trying to hit the two people. Suddenly the beast is struck by lightning. Then a beautiful lady pass by from above (the lightning comes from her). The lady continues jumping from one tree to another until she is out of their sight.
Male
“She is strong. Do you know her?”
Female
“I don't know her by name but she is known as yellow princess. She can create a large amount of lightning because or her vast amount of aura.”
Then the cyclops moves. The two people started to panic.
Male
“The beast moves again.”
Female
(Shouting) “Heeeeeeelp!!!”
Then suddenly several tiny explosion happens on the beasts. The two looked around and see a person wearing a black cloak with hood and the cloak's hood is covering the persons face. Then the person suddenly jumps.
Male
(Facing the female) “Who's that person? Do you know?”
Female
(Facing the Male) “I don't know either.”
In a different location of the same forest...
The person wearing a cloak with hood is running. He is avoiding the beasts while running and jumping. First there's a cyclops in his front so he slides between the cyclop's feet. Then he sees a bear-like beast is running towards him from the front and he also sense a beast coming from behind. He jumps before beasts will hit him. The two beasts hit each other. This is the moment that his hood falls off and his face shows. He's a little handsome. While in the air, a beast with the face and body of a human and tail, feet and wings of an eagle is approaching him so he change position (slow motion) on the air and avoided the beast. The person's name is Black. Black landed on the ground.
Black
“Why am I in this mess?”
Then a flashback light appears and covers the whole scene.
In a city...
A person (who looks sad and facing down) is walking at the sidewalk while there are vehicles moving fast on the road. His name is Eli. He is a 30 year old writer. He looks on people talking while hearing imaginary sounds.
Imaginary sound on Eli's mind
“He is a writer. His work is not bad but not good also.”
”His parents are not poor but not rich also.”
”In other words.”
“He is just normal.”
“Just normal (repeat 10 times while resonating in this mind)”
He didn't notice that he is already at the road. A bus moving very fast hits him. He flies above (slow motion) and landed on the ground. Then a bright flash of light covers the whole scene.
It is dark (Eli's Point-Of-View and his eyes are closed)...
Eli opens his eyes and blinks twice. He wakes up and sits. He sees a beautiful and sexy woman. Her name is Cera.
Cera
“Good morning Eli! Did you sleep well?”
Eli
“Who're you? Where am I?”
Cera
(Spouting) “You didn't answer my question.”
Eli has a blank face and can't analyze the situation.
Cera
(Normal Face) “So! To sum up everything... You are dead!!!”
Eli
(Loud Voice due to shock) “Whaaaaat???”
Then Eli remembers that he was hit by a bus.
Eli
(Lower Voice due to disappointment) “Oh... I see...”
Cera
“Don't you worry. We will grant you another life.”
Eli
(High Voice) “What????” (Low Voice) “Why????”
Cera
(Laughs) “Didn't I told you that we are in the God Realm? A place where the Gods and Goddesses lives?”
Eli
(Very Low Voice) “NOOOOOOO???”
Cera
“Well... Now you know.” (Laugh again)
Eli
“And who?” (Pointing his finger on Cera)
Cera
“Oh!!! Didn't I told you that my name is Cera?”
Eli smiled.
Cera
“Well!!! Enough of intoduction, let's go to the main topic. Follow me, we will go outside.”
Cera gets out of the room while Eli follows her.
In the God Realm...
The God Realm has long roads forward, upward and downward. It has lots of clouds and small houses that has one room. Cera and Eli are walking (Cera at the front). Eli walks while looking fom side to side and back.
Cera
“You are given another chance to live but... it is a different world.”
Eli
“Really? It looks like a fantasy world and I am a character of someone's novel.”
Cera
“It is not fantasy. It's real!!!”
Eli
“May I know what kind of world am I going to live?”
Cera
“It is a world that you can control your aura and convert it to a certain elements like water, wind, fire, and lightning.”
Eli
(Excited Voive) “Really? Can I do that?”
Cera
“Aahmmm... No!”
Eli
(Shock) “What???”
Cera
“Didn't I told you that you will be reborn with no ability to create elements?”
Eli
“Do you mean???”
Cera
“Yes! You will be a normal person. Though different from your original world, all the people living can control aura and it includes you of course.”
Eli
(Very Low Voice) “Oh...”
Cera
“Don't worry! I will introduce you to a God that can control an aura very well. He can help you in your journey...”
Eli
(Very Low Voice) “Oh...”
Cera
“We're here.”
They are in the front of someone's house.
Cera
“Let's Go inside and meet Onolev.”
Eli
(Low Voice) “Alright... Whoever he is... I'm JUST NORMAL.”
Cera entered the house followed by Eli.









2. The descriptions don’t have to be in bracket. It takes away from the little character description that we have and makes the sentence sound choppy when read aloud. Also, why separate the dialogue without the quotation marks? I almost didn’t read it as them talking
3. Not sure if I need to say this but just incase. You don’t have to try jumble everything into one chapter. It makes the chapter extremely long and exhaustive (especially if it’s not written well). You could separate all the events happening to create an impending emotion around 4 chapters instead of one. Would have appealed better
Otherwise, I LOVE the concept you have. I’ve never seen one like it and I hope to see more as it grows 🥰🥰