review

"my favourite chapter so far is, chapter 3. the plot of the story is really good. but sometimes all the fancy word's makes it really hard to understand. i think you should make the character's more relatable, to help with that i think you should put yourself in the characters shoes while you write. and to make them make more realistic choices. also while reading it i found a few typos, so you should fix that. oh and did i forget to mention PLEASE UPDATE ALREADY!!! thank you for reading ;)"