Something to think about.

"I read the whole story and became confused. Who is Lena? What does - He was a good mood mean? Why did the old women pick on Lena and Co. The first five lines of any story must grab the reader. If you fail to grab my attention in the first few lines, I stop reading. Most readers are like me. Most people don’t want to spend the first 5 pages trying to get into a book/story. Here are a few things I find annoying in the first lines of a story: Dialogue. Nice somewhere on the first or second page, but not in the first line. We won’t know who’s speaking or why we should care. Excessive description."Your story has none). Some description is good, but not when it’s long winded. Irrelevant information. The first few lines of your story are crucial, so give your reader important information. The last thing you want to do as a writer is annoy or bore people. Instead, try one of these 6 ways to hook your readers right off the bat: Make your readers wonder. Put a question in your readers’ minds. What do those first lines mean? What’s going to happen? Make them wonder, and you’ll keep them reading. Begin at a pivotal moment. By starting at an important moment in the story, your reader is more likely to want to continue so he or she can discover what will happen next. Create an interesting picture. Description is good when it encourages people to paint a picture in their minds. Often, simple is best so it’s the reader who imagines a scene, instead of simply being told by the author. Introduce an intriguing character. The promise of reading more about a character you find intriguing will, no doubt, draw you into a story’s narrative. Most often, this is one of the main characters. Start with an unusual situation. Show us characters in unusual circumstances, and we’ll definitely be sticking around to see what it’s all about. Begin with a compelling narrative voice. Open your story with the voice of a narrator we can instantly identify with, or one that relates things in a fresh way. No matter how you start your story, keep your readers in mind. What will make them want to continue reading? What will make them stop reading?"