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"I really enjoyed this story. I hope that you will post more soon. The storyline, with the girl being sent to marry the Emperor of the land is very intriguing. You fill the reader with tension from beginning to end, and the world that you create feels very real and tangible. I feel like you leave just enough unknown to keep the reader in mystery but you don't seem to withhold to much. I also appreciate the fact that, when dealing with more sensitive matters, you don't go into explicit detail. Most people would take the opportunity to make things vivid and graphic, so I'm glad that you had the discretion to leave it as it was. It was handled very well. The characters are interesting and kept the journey from getting dull. The writing itself was decent, but there were frequent grammatical errors and places where you used the wrong word. That should be easily fixed though. And also, some of the dialogue felt a little strained and unnatural. I would suggest reading it out loud and listening to it to work out the kinks. Other than that, great work! I can't wait to see what happens next!"