Semper Fi

"I will come back at a later date, I'll give you a chance to make corrections. I'm not sure if your young, just beginning to write. You have a lot of run-on sentences. A rule of thumb, if you put in a but or and you probably need a comma. In addition, also are other words to use in place of "and" all the time. A comma replaces and sometimes. You can include: ;moreover, ;however, by the way. Spell check also helps with sentence run ons. Good luck!"