What is your opinion?
Fabulous work Kaushik. It's splendid! I love the flow of story,no complication at all. Each scenario perfectly elaborated. Vocabulary that's lucidly used. I really enjoyed reading the novel. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
"I like the author's style of writing. Simple and lucid grammar which is rich of simple and fathomable vocabulary. This novel deserves the ratings that I gave. Thumbs up!"
The best thrilling suspenseful novel I've ever read
"What a story it is!!!! Each chapter is filled with suspence. I am amazed by the story writing of the author and would definitely recommend this novel to anyone. "
The Dream
"Very interesting story, love the ending."
The dream
"Great novel"
The Dream
"I really liked this story. It's very different from the ones I've read before. Unfortunately, the story is a bit short, but overall i really liked the plot and flow of story. I recommend this to people who liked mystery stories."
Good start, but needs work
"I'm going to start the way I always start. I'm an amateur just like you. Please feel free to ignore any or all of my advice. If I come across as harsh, please know that it is not the spirit in which this review is intended. The plot is interesting, but it is difficult to follow because the writing is pretty dry and simplistic. I'm only going to focus on the first paragraph for my feedback, as all the following paragraphs suffer from the same underlying issues. When writing a story, it is crucial to let the reader feel like he/she is experiencing what is happening. We do this by showing, not telling, and by presenting the information and events more informally. Your story feels like an essay on what I did over the summer. It tells us what is happening from one beat to the next, giving us no chance to experience the events. Imagine reading a police report about a mugging, as opposed to watching a YouTube video of the same mugging. One is an experience, while the other is just the facts listed on paper. I'm going to write your first paragraph verbatim, one sentence at a time, then identify issues and offer some potential solutions. (1) I woke up in the middle of the night; panting and sweating like I ran a full marathon, when in reality I had been fast asleep in my bedroom. You want to be careful with 'ing' words. There is nothing inherently wrong with them except, like adverbs, they are easy to overuse. When using metaphors and similes, you don't need to follow with: when in reality. A metaphor necessarily breaks from reality. We know the protagonist didn't actually run a marathon, so we don't need to recall the reader to reality. The reader will also naturally assume you are in your bedroom. You should only offer a detail if it is vital or contrary to expectation. For instance, if you woke up in your car, you could tell us that. An alternate way to write this could be: I woke up in the middle of the night, panting and sweating. It felt like I'd just run a marathon. (2) My memory foam pillow still drenched in sweat and the abstract print bed-sheet had swept from under me and lay there on the floor. This sentence is a grammatical mess, as well as clunky. First, does the reader need to know the pillow is memory foam, and the sheet has an abstract print? These details might reveal something about your character, but always ask yourself if the information is relevant. Next, make sure you are punctuating correctly. This sentence seems to say that both the pillow and sheet are now on the floor, but it is unclear. Last, how has the sheet been swept from under you? You also don't need to say: there on the floor. Just say, on the floor. This a great chance to engage your readers and make them feel like they're there with you. An alternate way to write this might be: I looked at the floor where my pillow and sheet now lay. The stains on the memory foam showed just how much I'd tossed and turned. It must have been violent to drag the sheet from underneath me. The crumpled fabric made it impossible to identify the abstract print I knew so well. (3) I could feel my heart throbbing against my chest and all I could do was reach for the bottle of water. Here is an excellent example of telling instead of showing. Don’t tell us you could feel your heart throbbing. Just say it throbbed. Also, break these up into two sentences. Be careful of calling the reader’s attention to an object with definite articles. By saying the bottle of water, you are referring to a specific bottle of water, which implies you have already introduced us to a bottle of water in the scene. Use the indefinite article, a or an, or better yet, give us a little more detail about the water that makes its appearance less mysterious. Another way to write this could be: My heart throbbed, and my chest ached. All I could do was reach for the bottle of water on my nightstand. This is getting pretty long, so I’ll stop here. Don’t be discouraged. This is a good start, and I like the premise. I would recommend reading up on style in writing to get a better grasp of the presentation. Also, read stories you like to write and try to incorporate some of the author’s style into your own. It will only help you improve."
Not quite what I hoped when I began reading
"Disliked the fact that Sarah died and the few times cuss words were used"
