Quite interesting short story!!

"I enjoyed the story and the way that you've described the characters, they're well developed. One thing that bugged me the most was the used of UPPER CASE. I usually preferred Sentence Case. Another thing is that maybe you should try using separate lines when a different person is speaking just to not confused your audience. Lastly, those small grammar and punctuation errors, it's an easy fix; which will make the story even more intriguing. Overall, it was really an interesting read. I wish you the best of luck for your future stories. From a fellow author, Anna"