Great start!

"First impressions, I love the story and characterisation! You have them down pat and there isn't anything that I can say that needs work in that area. Grammar and punctuation is very good, far better than mine. Though the only reason at this stage I gave just three stars in that category Brenda was simply because of the difficulty I had reading it (first chapter so far). It needs more paragraph breaks, that is about the only qualm I had with it. Overall, fabulous and I love the story so far. Oh, one small thing, unless I missed it, since it deals with Hammond, a date timeline hint would be great. Melanie xd"