What is your opinion?
Great start
"Nice start to the story. I particularly like the sprite, but all the characters seem interesting. I look forward to seeing where this goes."
Great read with lots of potential!
"This has been a great read so far. I can't wait to see more chapters in the future. Really liked the details you put into describing the world, it legitimately adds depth that really made come out more alive. Best thing is you don't overdo it, you put out those details when it is the appropriate time to describe them, and that doesn't flood the reader with too much details. And I love it how you portrayed the sense of urgency early on; something bad was going to happen, they need to leave, and you portrayed the sudden surprise and fear from the writing and the characters well. Keep it up! My gripe I had was how you put the word "you" in there, which made the perspective feel weird at times. However, this may seem more about writing style which is completely okay because it really doesn't ruin the story overrall; this was more of a small personnel nitpick. So far, everything about this a great read, and it emanates great potential. So, please, continue to write more of this awesome story."
