What is your opinion?
Quite entertaining
"I found this story very original and one of those that I simply can't stop reading until it is finished.wonderful story. Definitely worth the read."
Book not to miss reading
"There are very few books that keeps you intact to the storyline and this book is among those few that I have ever read. Amazing storyline, very nicely written... recommend everyone to give it a shot."
Interesting One!
"An amazing book to read and can't wait to read the next chapters..."
Must to read book
"Book is just amazing to read.. you will never get bored reading this book"
Awesome Book
"A book not to miss reading it."
Quite entertaining
"Found it entertaining and storyline is very interesting"
Interesting story line
"Interesting story line..must read it"
Best
"Till now found it interesting..waiting for more.. "
Great
"Great story, eager to know more about the story"
Interesting
"Found it interesting and wanted to read more"
Quite interesting story
"Amazing story want to read more"
Amazing
"Great story want to read more.. "
Interesting
"Book seems to be amazing. A new story plot."
Amazing
"From the prologue the story seems to be interesting. I really liked the writing style of the writer."
Fantastic
"I liked the book and the writing style of the writer the story seems to be interesting."
Great read!
"The story is pretty fun, the way they meet and everything is awesome, even though it was creepy how he kept staring and following her. The romance factor needs a bit of work to come off more natural. But aside from that, the characters are good and well developed. One thing I'd like for you to improve on is the grammar and punctuation and the excitement factor. These and description will all add a good backdrop to your settings, and our characters taking you writing from a 6 to a 10! Great to see different cultures being introduced as well!! Much love, Coffee"
Not bad.
"First of all, I like that there is no cliché "normal girl just so happen to attract the attention of a handsome rich guy". Instead the protagonists are both bussiness people so it makes sense they meet. Second, I noticed there are various spelling mistakes and sadly I can't say it's just some punctuation stuff. Luckily that's something that you'll get better at if you keep writing. The strong point is no doubt the characters and their relationships which is great for a romance. You're good using first person POV to give them voice. I'm going to left some tips so you can make them even stronger: -Don't indicate which character the POV is when you change it. You should try to left the narration indicate the reader what character is speaking. So far I had no problems differenciating characters so I think you just need to use Inkitt's tool to separate each POV. -Instead of telling us how the characters feel, describe what they feel. For example instead of having Shaurya say "Right now, I was very confused" have him say "Right now, I couldn't help but ask myself a thousand questions". You're explaining us the same but you're showing us instead of telling us, a fundamental rule of storytelling. Good luck and keep writing! "
Pretty Cool
"I like the family dynamic in this story. I like how many of the characters are well rounded and have reasons for their decisions. This is a story that I can read and learn about other people's cultures. I love that the novel includes people from a different country. However, there are many grammatical errors (I'm guessing English is not your first language) The plot seems to go by very quickly and I feel as if I'm missing something. Nice first four chapters!"
