A lot of potential but flawed.

"The plot is interesting, though it feels a bit generic at times. The concept of someone being transported to a world of their dreams after dying is cool, but the beginning of the story feels rushed. It doesn't build up enough emotional weight, even though the main character hated their old life. This could have made the start more impactful, rather than feeling slightly comedic. The main plot is decent, though it leans on common fantasy tropes. That's not necessarily a bad thing—generic stories can still be written well—but it didn’t feel as fresh as it could have. My main issues are with the pacing and the rawness of the story. The pacing is too fast, so some of the cooler ideas don't get the time they need to fully develop. The writing style is good, but it could be more polished. I think with more editing and refinement, this could easily be a solid 4/5. It has good characters, the plot makes sense, and overall it's an entertaining read, but with more polish, it could be even better."