Vengeance

"Okay, so first of all, if you don't agree with anything I say about this story, I apologize, but there was only one chapter for me to read and get a good view of the story. But if you can keep an open mind, feel free to continue reading. The story starts off kinda in the middle of the story almost, which helps it be more entertaining and it captures the readers' attention, but it would get their attention so much more if you could try to add some background details like background or description of the area or who the character saw. I'm not saying what is there currently isn't good because it IS and I enjoyed it a lot, but I'm trying to provide a few (hopefully helpful) tips in this review as well as giving an overview of sorts. The main character, Lexi Green, is cool. She's sassy and she doesn't back down from people leering at her, which is pretty epic because I would DEFINITELY shy away from that. Now, it'd be cool if you described her expression more because what's better than a girl ignoring her boss's lewd glances? A girl inwardly flipping that guy off as the pretends to ignore the glance. That would definitely help Lexi achieve the title 'badass.' Now, the plot isn't very established (as it nearly never is in chapter 1) so I can't say much about it, but I will say, if you added a few teaser details to her mission, like explaining how the things her boss gave to her were arranged or felt or made Lexi feel, that would make the reader really want to read the next chapter. All that said, I may be ENTIRELY wrong about the author's style of writing, so feel free to ignore my tips. Maybe you meant to write it exactly like you did and don't want to change it. That's your choice as the author of a work. That said, I really enjoyed chapter one and it reminded me of my own book in progress, so I think it would be cool seeing you add the details I described. All in all, what I saw of Vengeance was REALLY GOOD and I hope to see more soon!! :)"