What is your opinion?
Great
"Sweet, short fairytale. I really enjoyed reading. "
The Last Kelpie Review
"I gave this novel an overall 3.5-4/5 stars because the main couple was interesting, the setting was decently laid out, and the plot was very interesting to read however the story was way too short, having a character who is consciously all-powerful gives the character little room for growth and depth, and some characters were more like caricatures. Suggestions; Mistress Cole definitely needs more backstory to her, give her some depth. The conflict was resolved way too easily, up the stakes a bit or lower Gil's ability range to make it more intriguing but make sure not to wrap up the story quickly because it could be seen as a rushed ending. Notes: I shall uppercut Mistress immediately. She should be thankful I haven't done it at all... yet (C.1). There are some inconsistencies I have saw such as since he'd to finish" it could be "since he had to finish" rolls out more naturally (C.1). A few grammatical errors also in the same paragraph: "It was a hot now" and "he'd no wish to be on the receiving...(C.1)" First, the name Kelpie sounds adorable, and Second, I agree that they should leave them alone (C.1). There needs to be some information about the Kelpies or the Faerlum because I'm reading and have no idea what the narrator is talking about. This ruins my immersion (C.1). The straightacity of it all! I mean the heteronormativity showing out in here (C.1). I'm 99.99 percent sure that Kelpie is harmless (C.2). Smart dude (C.2). Also, I was right the Kelpie is harmless (C.2). I would have run away anyway, you never know if that strange knows someone from Tam's village (C.3). "In my opinion" sounds rather modern for a story like this but perhaps I'm wrong (C.3). Is his name Tam or Tom (C.3)? Mistress Cole just likes attention from my perspective (C.3). No longer confused about the name (C.4). I see why the story is so short (C.5). Wonder how this would be if this story was longer (C.5). Let them be gay (C.6)! Always the conservative-minded individuals who tend to have the upper hand. This all-powerful thing makes the story less impactful now that Gil can do almost anything he wants to (C.7)."
