What is your opinion?
In Talon's Grasp
"Very well written. It's suspenseful. Great character descriptions"
In Talon’s Grasp
"The story moves along quite well. "
In Talon's Grasp
"This is a fast-past novel with action, romance, comedy and a horse with an attitude. What's not to like?"
The Talon's Grasp
"Great job, you really left me hanging there with assassins and shark ships. Have you finished it? Is this the limit that InkItt allows? I’m no expert in fantasy, nor well read in it (Hunger Games, Harry Potter, Rhapsody series, Dune, some others). For myself, I love changing POV, and I don’t mind it in scene when well done, most of the time you do it really well, and the story flows. It is all about the story flowing and the reader not having to come up for breath. In other genres changing POV it is a bit out of fashion =p But great writers can slip it in without the reader realizing it. In the beginning, the characters seemed a bit clichéd, but they have really become engaging, and I want to know what happens to them. Is this a series? Will the Evil Wizard be defeated in this book, or subsequent ones? Inquiring minds want to know. You have lot of action and good descriptions. I get a solid sense of place and setting. But…there is always a but, you do a lot of telling not showing. You narrate to the reader what is happening, quite well, but it can be stronger and more engaging if you show. More dialogue can be a good way to do that. Staying in one characters POV a bit longer, revealing what happened through their senses. That said, fantasy isn’t my specialty, and if you have a long saga-and you have good action and adventure here-maybe telling is the best way to get a lot said to keep the plot rolling. Some very minor grammatical stuff, but it didn’t interrupt the story much for me, I just kept reading! Keep writing. I enjoyed it very much. And I do want to read the rest, I need to know who it ends."
In Talon's Grasp
"I really like the details the author puts into the characters and story. He has a good imagination. It's a great adventure. "
Fun Sword and Sorcery yarn
"Harper has the storyteller gene, definitely. While the plot and characters are similar to a lot of others of this type of story I've read over the years, there are some fresh, original touches, and the writer's "voice" is engaging. The story definitely keeps moving along at a good clip! That's the very hardest thing to get right in telling a story. You can learn the mechanics, but you can't "learn" how to tell a story. You have to have the instinct for it, and Harper has that instinct. I'm a stickler for good writing mechanics, however: grammar, punctuation, spelling, correct word usage, sentence structure, etc., and there are a LOT of problems in these areas; it kicked me out of the story several times. Also, a floating, omniscient POV only works when it's used absolutely correctly, and most new writers have trouble with it; Harper is no exception. A single POV per chapter would be best for this particular story. It would not be tough to do. Or even a single POV per section. Overall: I hope to be able to read the rest of it, and with a little editorial help I think Harper has a rollicking fun read here."
