What is your opinion?
Storm Warning
"Loved it..tho its short!!"
STORM WARNING
"LOVE THIS STORY! HOPEFULLY THIS ISN'T THE END! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK BUT PLEASE MAKE THE STORY A LITTLE LONGER! "
A great second chance at connecting with another person again.
"I like that writer has put two characters that have problems together in a situation that sometimes happens. The writer also made a good paced story that didn't take to long to get to the point. It's a good read for me five stars all the way."
Ben & Selena
"Best smut story! This short story have a potential to be whole book ❤"
So fun to read!
"Excellent short story with an great story line! "
Storm Warning
"Great short story! Easy/fast paced read. The smut was great! Steamy but not cringey. It definitely left me wishing the characters the best! I like how it ends with an open for another installment! "
Innocent
"Hot steamy stairwell! Oh Em Gee soaked totally soaked. Need more "
A fun read!
"This was a very fun story to read! I love the lead characters and the twist of her being his boss. I think that’s a fun concept to play with as it’s so often the other way around in erotica. Especially loved Benton, I felt for him and his situation and his personality was a nice change from having a super possessive and toxic male lead. The writing style flowed very nicely, and I didn’t notice any grammar mishaps. Overall fantastic job! :) "
Interesting
"Can't wait to continue"
Great short story
"I really enjoyed the story - the characters and the plot were interesting and well-developed. There were a few technical things that brought me out of the story though: first, the tense. The story is written in present tense, which is unusual but interesting, but there were some parts where it got confusing and seemed to slip into past tense. Or, there was background given on people that should have been past tense but was present tense instead. Second, there were some word choices that were either the wrong words, or just unusual enough to make me question whether that was your intention or not. There was one reference to a "bottom down shirt" instead of "button down". In the last chapter she "shutters" instead of "shudders", that sort of thing. I think with another read-through and some minor editing it could be really great."
Don't be mad at the *'s
"The story needs a little more polish for me. There are a few tweaks needed for example I wouldn't have written "he'd tediously rubbed her clit" that doesn't seem enjoyable, well not to me lol. There are a few long run on sentences which needs tidying but these things can be fixed with practice or another set of eyes to edit, everyone makes mistakes. It did get better as it continued with bits of good writing and some of the sex bits were good too, hot. Keep practicing and try adjusting the prose from frequently writing - "She was angry. She shouted at him then she kissed him." Type thing. Alternatively maybe something like, "Anger flowed from her prompting a loud shout before she assaulted him with her lips." Hope the feedback helps its meant as a positive ;-) Good luck with the writing."
