Great beginning

"I read the first bit of this story and thought I'd review it while it's still fresh on my mind. I really enjoyed the first chapter from beginning to end. The idea of the slaughter in the night and Rosalia's loss was very interesting. I like how she took things over and became the strong female character that many fantasy stories lack. The plot is very intriguing, but I would have liked to see you explore the happenings of that night in more depth. I think that you could have played up on the description of the room before the murder and then the struggle between her and the assassin. I think that the loss of her innocence might be more affecting if there is more of a fight. If we see her anger and fear and see her struggling for her life and for vengeance over the death of her crow. I am very hooked on imagery, so it would be more powerful to me if the reader could really SEE it rather than having it told to them. The writing itself was generally good, although it confused me toward the beginning. It left me wanting more, so that's always a good sign. I really like where this is going. I think that this could be a really enthralling story if you gave it just a little more. Great work! I hope that this does well in the contest!"