Chapter 1
It was mid spring when me and my family was looking for a playground to have a picnic at.We were going down at smooth road when suddenly,we went pass a bump or something.We thought that we hit animal. When that happen none of us said or did anything. The only thing we heard was wind hitting or ears, but looking back we saw nothing so we kept driving. An hour went by and we finally arrived at a playground that my parents found suitable, but as soon as i saw the park a chill went down my spine. It looked deadly. The swings were creaking, the trees where flowing in the wind with leaves barely holding on. It look as if no one been there for years. It was creepy. I heard something whisper in my ear telling me to go away. I turned around looking for the owner of the voice but to my dismay i saw no one but my family unloading the things from the car. the was gonna be a long day.
BTW, there are some misspelled words, and "I" needs to be capitalized. There are also some missing commas. If you fix those mistakes, then your book will be much better. :)
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