What is your opinion?
Sara
"Plot in a different direction. Very interesting"
Very good
"I like it soooo much"
Great young adult fiction
"I read the first three chapters of this story and have really enjoyed it so far. You set up a lot of things plot-wise to keep the reader engaged -- the quiet, studious girl with the seizures, the abusive mother, the dreamy-eyed boy. From the beginning, you do a great job keeping the reader engaged. I think that the protagonist is great, you sympathize for her and she's not just two-dimensional. I thought that a lot of the characters and elements of the story were a bit stereotypical, just what you'd expect in the story of a high school girl. I think that you can make it work if you add layers beneath the clichés, but as it was, it was a bit too much of the expected. I think the character that I found most interesting was the mother's character, just because I don't quite understand her yet and I want to know more about her history and motives. Something that I noticed about the writing was that I loved the way you ended the chapters. They always left me wanting to go to the next chapter, and that's a great thing to employ in your story. The writing itself was very good. I don't think I noticed a single typo going through, and it had very good imagery. I want to see how it turns it. This is great work so far. Good luck in the contest!"
