Home Run!

"So yeah, I loved it! But, I was wondering why you stopped? You had a great plot and you were developing the characters quite well. The main character was becoming more OOC, but that could be explained if you took the time to show a couple points where Xander remembers Kara's past and maybe socket in some of her reactions as s/he realizes that they react differently while in a female body and a Kryptonian one at that... It would have cleared up a lot of ambiguity. S/he's reaction to eating chocolate would be a good point. Maybe adding in a period or a reaction to a soppy chick flick... Just ease the reader into the changes a bit? Also, emphasize the reaction to solar energy a bit? Just a few thoughts, hope all is well."