What is your opinion?
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"I really love this story,its interesting and thrilling."
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"Interesting"
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"So far so good"
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"Although I like the plot of the story so far, there are a few mistakes. Like the punctuation, for example. I think it would be better if there was quotation marks to point out the dialogue, and italics to point out the character's thoughts. Writing is hard work, and nobody is perfect when it comes to grammar, as there are a bunch of ways to write a story to make it unique. I feel like some paragraphs are really long, and for me it is harder to focus and understand the reading. Usually I think it would be better that each time you start a dialogue, to make a new paragraph for it. For example: "Hey, Emma," I turned to look at West, his smile waking up the butterflies in my stomach, "How are you doing?" "I'm good, West," I cleared my throat, feeling it clog up, "And you?" "Nothing much, just missing you, is all." He averted his eyes, just as I saw the barest hint of a blush. He started fidgeting with his ID, never letting go of it. (keep explaining) Nevertheless I really enjoyed reading it. I would definitely recommend it!"
