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Style on point

"I think you've really found your style here. In reading apart 1, there were parts that felt stilted and stiff, like you were feeling your way long (mostly at the beginning) but as it went along, and through the ending, it was like you got warmed up. Well, Part 2 starts warmed up, and stays that way! Wow! I was carried along for the ride, wondering, hoping, sighing, and laughing. Great job! Some editing to do, but overall, just wonderful!"

Great imagery

"I really like this story so far! I just read the first bit, but I hope to read more when I get a chance. Your writing is so clear and evocative. It was really just fascinating watching your characters interact and think. I love that you left me wondering but still gave me enough information to be pulled into the story. I am really interested in knowing more about this world that you are creating. The writing itself was tight and concise without being overly flowery. I can't wait to see where it's going. I think that the only part I was uncertain about was the list of gods in the first chapter. It is fine, I just tend to think that when I glance over a story, a list at the beginning sort of turns me off to it. Either way, this is a great story so far. Good work!"