I like it!

"Your'e writing style is very good, it made me feel empathy with the main character. I enjoyed reading about the food in the bakery (it literlly made me hungry) and about your characters, It will take me some time to remember all the names but I like the guy that supports and protects Ivy all the time. (If I remember correctly his name is Tom, I hope I'm not wrong). I'm interested to know what is going to happen with the rich guy, he made a bad first impression, but after reading all five chapters I think that he's a good person, cocky, but good. About the technical writing skills I can't say anything since English is not my native language, but I don't think you had any grammar mistakes or problems. One thing that happend to me is that I got bored when there were a lot of ditails. I like details but sometimes when there are a lot it makes me zone out from the story and kind of skip the details so I can get to interesting things where the plot is progressing. I'm talking about ditails of the bakery for example, there where so many things so I skipped some parts, sorry. I don't think that it's something that you should change since it is necessary for the story, but maybe you could add some breakes while describing something, like, if you discribe a place, you can put some small ditails about it, continue with a dialog or something, and then come back and add more ditails, so it will feel more light. The plot is nice and I want to know more about Ivy's nightmare and her backstory. And I want to see how will the sexy rich boy will meet Ivy again, and hope their conversation would be better next time!"