What is your opinion?
Amazing
"The story is amazing. Each chapter leaves you on the edge, wanting to know more. As the story unfurls, the twists are entertaining and unpredictable. You don't see them coming. I ended up finishing this book in one sitting and it was worth it!"
A roller-coaster
"You made me hate her in the beginning, what's with her laziness and bossiness a typical rich attitude and him acting smitten and then those twists and turns of events and situations until you reveal all the reasons and explanations behind. Lots of secrets.Thank you. It's a story worth a sleepness night until my battery runs out. "
The scrupulous gentleman
"Love every bit of it, very well written, sistence "
Nice story
"I like Stella 's character. Super novel. I say it's Peter and shopia who are the killers"
Well written
"The story has a great flow and is very interesting. The start of the story is intriguing and the plot is builded up nicely. Also I love the selection of names as Edmund, Richard etc... These names are well suited to the story theme.The language used is perfect for the earlier times as well. Overall ; Nice story suiting for the earlier times ; ] -Sanu 123-"
Well done!
"This was a unique story. I like the fact that while it revolves around Stella's family drama, Edmund is who we read about first. We see his lifestyle and how he is instead of following Stella from the start. I think that was a really interesting approach and I genuinely enjoyed that. I like the amount of character development that happened with Stella and Edmund. I think it was really important that you showed that growth from beginning to end the way that you did. And really well done! I did really enjoy it and it was easy to follow. I think with some editing and some tweaks to your punctuation this story will really stand out!"
Really Interesting
"This genre is a little foreign to me but that didn't stop me from enjoying it. The plot is intriguing and the characters, one of the biggest elements of any story, are designed well. They feel very real. I like Edmund a lot and Stella is pretty great. The plot too is pretty well designed. The pacing isn't too fast and neither too slow. I also like that you make your chapters long cause I honestly love reading longer stories more than shorter ones. I also like the way you started by describing the normal life of the characters before gradually sliding into the juicy bits. However, you should focus a little on the change in tenses. You seem to switch that a lot. It's a minor error though and can easily be fixed with a little editing. I love this book and honestly can't wait for more of your works."
Well written
"The story has a great flow and is very interesting. The start of the story is intriguing and the plot is builded up nicely. Also I love the selection of names as Edmund, Richard etc... These names are well suited to the story theme.The language used is perfect for the earlier times as well. Overall ; Nice story suiting for the earlier times ; ] -Sanu-"
Outstanding Story!
"I absolutely loved the story from the start till the end, It is one of the best Mystery books, I have ever read. It looks just like a professionally published book. I really enjoyed the plot as well, which was great according to a thriller Novel. I was also impressed by the length of the chapters, It made the reader blend into the story, so that the reader can imagine it in His/Her mind, I had the same feeling! I read this book as if I was watching a movie, It would look more amazing if it were a movie. I recommend you that you keep writing more stories, I wish this book to be more successful in the future. I would suggest you that "forward your book on different platforms to get more read and reviews!" Thanks! and Remember "A Book is an Infinite Universe of Creativity""
The Scrupulous Gentleman
"I just felt like reading all through but I am sure I have had enough to give a constructive feedback ( Read up to chapter 4 ) The story is lovely and I like the content and the build-up. It will certainly make an interesting read. I suggest you reformat long paragraphs, check your grammar usage, and bring in a few characters if you can. Edmund's role is comedic in many ways and I love it!"
The Scrupulous Gentleman
"I left most of my comments for bits that need changing in the comments, so moving swiftly on. That was bloody fantastic!!!!! I read the whole thing in one day, it took me about ten hours and I'm actually going to bed late now, but I just wanted to know what happened, and I'm glad I stayed up. You Know Who (not Lord Voldemort, just trying not to give away any spoilers) being the murderer, is a right shock as actually, she was the only family member I liked as she most closely resembled me, an outcast, quieter than the others less self-confident. One point I would like to make, the epilogue after the letter (well done on that by the way. Did not see that coming!) is very long and specific but not overly detailed, readers often like to imagine themselves what happens to the characters after the book closes, rather than being told. Keep up the Stella work ***** Sofia"
Very interesting story.
"I am not much of a mystery thriller reader, but I did find this story curious and wanting to find out more when reading. It was nice to see a development in the character Stella as she has given more of an interesting vibe to her. The other characters had good development. My only thing is the story is a bit rigid at times but overall I genuinely liked it. Especially, with me always trying to guess who is the killer as I thought at times I figured it out. Good work on the book."
The Scrupulous Gentleman
"I always love a good thriller and to be honest I really loved the book. The description kept me hooked and the little insight of the characters life made me want to know them more. This is definitely worth a read. Apart from some sentence construction and grammatical issues the story is really good. I really hope that you keep writing stories like these. Good Work!!!"
Nice
"I like it. It's thrilling and the characters are well-formed. Good job!"
It's good.
"The introduction captured my attention and made me think that I was going to thoroughly enjoy it. However, one problem I have found it how the sentences are structured. The way the story is written seems like the author is just telling us what happened instead of describing the story and letting it unfold in a natural way. The story also keeps on switching between tenses and is quite fast paced, which makes it hard to read, The story would be an easier read if it was in one tense, and would flow better if you slowed it down. Aside from this, I like the story and the characters, and can't wait to see how it develops. Sort those SPaG errors and you should be good to go. Thanks, P.A,E"
The Scrupulous Gentleman
"I don't know where to start, there are positive and negative comments I'm going to mention, so excuse me if I sound harsh. Firstly, you must know and be sure that your story has potential, as the events are well planned and plotted and each of your characters is unique in their own way. The chapters are excruciatingly long, and you started the story by narrating about the usual life of Edmund. Usually, when starting a story, it's favorable for readers to start with something happening. Start with drama. Stir action. Raise questions. So, to me, your story started when Edmund bumped into Stella. That's when something changed in his life and he had to take the journey and help Stella. Starting with something happening at the very beginning of the story gets the readers hooked and keeps them looking for answers to their questions. Chapter one should be short and catchy. Your characters are unique. There's Edmund, who seems rude and irresponsible at first, but is actually trying to help Stella, and trying to teach her about real life. Then there's Stella, the spoiled princess. I never got to understand her; she was jumping from one emotion to another in fractional seconds. Technically, your writing style tells the story instead of showing it. You're always narrating events, being very detailed with characters' actions, which leaves no space for readers' imagination; and I couldn't feel anything as you kept telling. Showing vs telling is a major issue in writing. Describing emotions, body language, and using figurative speech helps with showing what's happening, and allows readers to bond better with the characters. Pay attention to some switches from present to past tense, and pay attention to repetition of words, and even phrases and sentences that describe the same situation. You tend to use forms of sentences a lot like "X does something AS Y does another" and "X begins to do something..." And you use 'say' a lot. Using strong verbs helps replace weak adverbs. For example: instead of "Stella says irritated as she turns away from him" you can say "Stella snaps and looks away." Pay attention to comma usage, try reading aloud to know where to put the comma. Overall, the story is good, and has potential and I enjoyed it! Nice work!"
Review
"I would say that this book is worth reading. I have just started reading it and I'm totally hooked. I often don't read it till the end when I don't feel like it but this one definitely needs a read. You have done a really good job back there and I appreciate your skills. You have a potential to write. Apart from the grammatical and some punctuation mistakes ( which can be undone by the editor ), the story was overall a good rating. I would definitely suggest it. The introductions were also professionally described but one thing that disturbed me was just the long paragraphs and mixup that was messing with the story. I'm not reading this for a swap though I really felt like it. And I really did read it. Keep writing, keep Inspiring! :)"
