Interesting plot but needs polish.

"For Chapters 1-5 that I've read I see a lot of promise for what might be in store for Take-Kun. The characters are definitely interesting, aside for Hotaru san. There just isn't any development for him yet. This isn't a critique but more of a preference for me. But, I find myself reading Take-Kun as TaKKun it's 1 syllable shorter and I find it easier to read it that way, plus I previously thought friends who are really close would sometimes give each other nicknames. I just imagined Aki-Chan calling him that way. since they're childhood friends My personal favorite of the Novel so far is absolutely Ryuu San, for a man who only say's like 4 lines and is really only described by Take Kun and others.. I Just need more plot and character development. Aside from that correct the spelling and grammatical errors and that would make the the entire reading experience a lot more enjoyable. Keep em coming!!!"