What is your opinion?
her wolf inside
"I love the start to this story and I look forward to reading the rest! I think some more details and history would help make it really great. I think it could use a little work on synonyms too. I think the 4th chapter is my favorite so far, the scene you created between them is supper sweet."
Great bones!
"I do like the plot of the story. It follows some tropes that are fairly common in werewolf type stories, but it's different enough that it's not cliche. Someone else mentioned this in another review but I'll mention it again: The paragraphs need to be broken up. Huge walls of text are extremely hard to read and immediately turn readers off, no matter how good the actual writing is. I also think this plot moves a bit fast and there's a lot more telling than showing. For example, there could be ways that you show us that her step father is abusive and that her relationship with her mother is strained rather than simply telling us it is. For example, she can maybe bang into something and hit a bruise and then recall where that bruise came from. I also think the ****** separators are a bit confusing since I'm not sure what they represent and they seem to be everywhere. I'd like to see longer periods of the POVs rather than having it be one paragraph as one person and the next is a different person. That way it doesn't seem so rushed/too fast paced. Overall, these are easy things to fix (except maybe the showing v. telling thing, but that's something everyone, including myself, does) so just going through and putting those changes in can vastly improve things. You got the most important stuff right, so keep it up!"
Poor girl!
"The story is off to a nice start! I like where the plot is going, but I will say that the grammar leaves a lot to be desired. Long, unbroken paragraphs with no breaks for separate dialogue tags are NOT easy to read... >.> Still, Blakely is sweet, and I hope she goes through /plenty/ more misery before she earns her happy ending~"
