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What is your opinion?
Super Beginning
"Great Start! Keep going!"
Good Start!
"I liked the way you made everything white, and how realistic the characters' thoughts were. What's happening? Why is she in that room? Is she insane? Some of these could also be made into trains of thought instead of mere questions, but the chapter was enjoyable and you have a lovely writing style. You occasionally switch tenses and have several mistakes through-out (which is okay, normal, especially in a first draft.) These could be edited out. In a few places, you could also show some things more. Maybe the place smells of something. But otherwise, this was a great start. Good luck with the story!"
