What is your opinion?
Beautifully Sad Inner Monologue
"You're writing style is pretty solid, conversational even. I really enjoyed that aspect. I found myself both saddened and slightly disgusted with the character, but in a good way. You made me feel what is truly like for her. I felt as if I was her. Even though there were a few minor technical mistakes, I didn't have a hard time overlooking that aspect. You should be very proud of what you've accomplished. It's a great piece that just needs a little polishing. One last thought is that a little more dialogue might help break up the monotony of inner monologue, but even with that, I would still purchase this based on what I've already read. Great work!!!! :)"
Something Different
"This is something very different from anything I've read recently, and I found myself intrigued by the desolation of the monologue. This would be a great read for someone looking for something with drama and a sense of depth. It's also well written technically, making it easy to read. If I could suggest anything it would be to find a way to break up the monologue at times. Great potential, overall!"
