Intriguing read!

"Hi. I enjoyed reading the first chapter of your story. Imade is a great and relatable female character, and I liked all the other characters too. Taye seems like a nice guy and a good friend. I hope his and Imade's friendship is spared despite their differences. I'm also curious to find out what happened between Imade and Dapo, and why he ended up leaving her. The plot is interesting, and though your technical writing style is different than what I'm used to see, it was easy reading on the eyes. There seemed to be more telling than showing though in the story. I don't know if you've heard of that writing technique, but there is a difference between the two of them. Telling explains what's happening in the story, but showing allows the reader to experience characters' thoughts, senses, and feelings. It's being descriptive of characters' actions and their world/settings, which I think was scarcely done. Imade and the other characters live in a foreign land, which not everyone has been to before. If you used the five senses and described a little more of their culture and the place in which they lived, I think it could work wonders with this book. Other than that, I thoroughly enjoyed it. Looking forward to reading more! :)"