Poor use of English

"So the very first sentence really threw me off guard. I mean, ‘The cell was dark and with no lights’? That sounds extremely redundant. I like the tone of the story but I couldn’t read past the second chapter because of your writing. Perhaps you can read more and learn a little more about the English language before writing another story. Your grammar and punctuation is off and you can definitely work on your diction. What I’m trying to say is, your story by itself is fine, but the writing makes it extremely difficult to go on reading after a point. A few sentences are also structured quite confusingly, and I feel you need to untangle them for a reader to fully grasp your message."