What is your opinion?
I love the story
"The writer is awesome. Awesome! Awesome! Awesome! Awesome! Awesome! Awesome! Awesome! Awesome! Awesome! Awesome Awesome! Awesome!"
Operator
"I really liked the story idea. There are a few times that it was hard to tell who was talking but I was able to figure it out rather quickly. There was some suspense although I think this story could use a little more. All and all I would definitely recommend this to others. It's short enough that it won't take you a super long time to read. I hope that you plan on writing more soon. I want to find out what happens with Ash, Evan, and Tobi."
Operator
"Honestly? I think Operator's an amazing story. It's witty, well-written, has some humor in it, and the slightly cliff-hangers give the story just the right amount of suspense to keep people guessing, and wanting more. If you like thriller/mystery novels, I totally recommend this one for the above reasons."
Pretty decent.
"It's an enjoyable easy read. It trips up a little bit, it seems a little juvenile and not as in depth as I'd like. I want to feel research when I read mysteries. I want to feel like I'm there. But for a first outing, which I'm assuming this is, it's competetent. The overall story kind of twangs of some lovecraft although, I'm probably wrong, it's more than likely a coincidence, but it reminded me of shadow over innsmouth a little bit for some reason. Makes me long for some slight hinted supernatural elements to the plot. The build up to the plot is good, nothing really happens in the first chapter but it's fine, it's all set up, the story is laid out, now the detective just has to immerse himself in it to get the ball rolling. The writing style is a ok, a little haphazard, a little wet. I'm more into hard edge noir and this is very loose, which stands to reason, this isn't a hard nosed vet this is a wet behind the ears pup and that was made apparent from the get go. So as a piece of YA fiction it works perfectly. The technical writing needs work though, I don't know some of the dialogue runs together and it's tough to tell who says what sometimes. Otherwise, overall it's nicely put together. Keep up the good work."
The operator
"I liked the first two chapters, but the plot trailed off after that, and the ending didn't really surprise me. I would be liked more twists and turns, but I still enjoyed reading it. I also would've liked to know more about if Eddie was brainwashed. That part seemed too vague. Cheers to you, author, and keep on writing!"
