What is your opinion?
A Great Start for an Epic Story!
"I love the story. It is interesting to have Alexander the Great as female. And the rebirths. I believe in rebirths. It is a struggle focusing on this life amid the confusion of remembering bits of one's past. You paint that well. Suggestions: 1. It might be too repetitive for them to struggle with their love so long. It is realistic. Maybe, give both of them love interests besides each other. Maybe, have Alex have a crush on Sam. She doesn't understand why, it would show the effects of their past lives. She attracted to people who want to destroy others. I would still have Alex and Jacob get together in the end, though. She learns more of her mistakes as she sees the weaknesses of Sam. 2. All of their lives Alex and Jacob have tried to rule the world and have nearly destroyed it so many times. This life they are the ones who save it. 3. Develop the backstory more. Not really sure what to make of the zombie human rabies thing. There is a lot of confusion when presenting that arc. I really do think you have a great story. I hope you continue to work on it and develop it further. I want to see the progress of this story and see it to its end."
HAUNTED
"I'm guessing that this is a rough draft of a story that you are working on. There are several none sentences and several sentences that are missing words, From the first paragraph and on through the remaining story. Editing, would really help to pull this story together. On the flipside I love the story's plot, and look forward to reading the rest of this story. NRF"
