Dominic
(ELLA'S POV)


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Ella Summers is an ordinary twenty year old woman studying at NYU to be a writer. That is until she meets Dominic, Logan and Christian three gorgeous brothers of the Dark Moon pack with many secrets. Ella soon learns the brothers like to share , and not just their car if you catch my drift...as Ella falls deeper for each of these hadsome bad boys she soon realizes there is no escape.
(ELLA'S POV)
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sorry if you got confused but , it seemed self explanatory too me .... she is in love with three different werewolves all brothers her brother is their best friend she has no friends so meets them at a party that her brother takes her too.
Where to start? The premise seems good and the blurb was a good hook. However the total wall of text is very hard to read. If you look away it's hard to find your place again. So, I'm sorry, it's TOO hard to make total sense of what you're trying to say, so I can't read on. I'm not sure if you want to know are bothered but in the interest of helping your writing improve here goes:
1. You need to proof your spelling. They were in a mansion,
2. You need to know the difference between their and there.
Re; THEIR names being THERE next to hot in the dictionary.
3. Proper use of to and too.
4. You went about 20 lines with barely a comma and no full stops. One way can be to read it aloud and when you need to take a breath put a comma and or maybe a full stop. Plus reading aloud helps you hear how it sounds and if things make sense.
5. The punctuation needs to be beside the last letter, or in front of the first letter. Not away like this , - " Or that."
That's what I can give without going in to everything and I hope it helps a little. If you're not able then get someone to proof read for you, someone can catch what you miss or become blind to in your words because sometimes we see what we think is there or wgat we think we've written. Good luck in the future, keep trying, because that's the only way you'll improve. Oh and everyone makes mistakes! 😜

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