What is your opinion?
Good Start!
"I think overall I would have given the story 3.5 stars, but since I didn't think it quite deserved 3 and we can't do half stars on Inkitt, I opted to overall give it 4. Starting with the plot: I think the enemies to lovers trip for vampires and werewolves is, as you probably know, very common. I've read a lot of stories like this before, but they work, so I can't really knock it can I? I'm hoping you maybe bring something else in to make it a bit more original, but the story isn't complete so I guess that remains to be seen. All in all, for plot, I would suggest you bringing in some other factor to make this stand out from the rest of the stories that follow this same trope. For style, you clearly have a very laid back, almost conversational writing tone. I like it, but sometimes it can get almost a little too casual. For example, you add a joke about her being 3 feet tall and say "she ain't a hobbit" in the first chapter, and I think that would turn a lot of people off to this story unfortunately. It just doens't feel as professional, esp since it's not first person. That kind of tone would almost work better if this story was from a first person point of view, but from a third person narrator, I'm not sure if it works as well. I think you can keep a more casual, laid back tone, but I'd maybe dial back a little bit to make it sound better, or change to first person narration. Also, I think there is a lot of telling in this story rather than showing. i want to figure things out about how the world works and who these people are/how they react rather than being told. So, that's something else to maybe look back on. There are quite a few grammar mistakes, especially with capitalization, so a couple rounds of editing would be helpful to tighten things up a bit since the mistakes do take away from the story as a whole. Some positives I want to point out are that I enjoy the strong female lead. Hate when female leads are depicted as weak, feeble minded, etc, so I like that she's a badass who stands up for her beliefs and I hope you keep her that way. I just wish there was a bit more mystery in their developing romance (a will they won't they that you sort of give away in the journal entry in the first chapter) so I think that could be maybe held back a bit more as mystery and tension. All in all, good start! Hope this doesn't come across mean or anything, and of course take everything with a grain of salt! Good luck!"
A Fatal Love
"I was asked to reveal this prior request since you reviewed mine. I absolutely loved how you gave the MC perspective and depth. I like vampires and werewolves, so I'm excited to see ho far this will go. I only have concerns about the capitalization and just keep writing and being yourself. I hope this kind criticism aids you, dear. ari_skies"
