What is your opinion?
It's really good, just needs a few edits!
"Hi! I was already interested by this story so when we chatted and you asked if I could review it, I was very excited! I love the plot and how you portray Kageyama, the only thing I'd change is separating paragraphs. 4-6 sentences per paragraph is the best way to go, though if the sentences are long, maybe only 2-3 sentences. I think maybe adding a few chapters between the ones you already have about the reader and Kageyama bonding might be a good idea, and maybe have the bathing together thing saved for after they get together? I have a few ideas, having Hinata try and flirt with Y/N or Kageyama and invite them to a match, while getting ready to go, as they have talked about it, bonded, and are dating, agree to bathe together. Other than that, I'd only work on the paragraphs and punctuation/grammar. You truly have a lot of talent and are a very good writer! Have a wonderful day/night!"
Kage Cuddles
"Not what I expected, but that is what writing is all about. Other than it could use more character and plot development, I think this will interest those who are into manga series. "
Sorry I Accidentally Deleted my Review
"Kageyama was very out of character. But idk, I don't read ship stories."
