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Great Ideas
"I love the idea that you have behind this story; but it needs more plot development. The obvious plot is getting back the serum, but what else is there. I like the fact that you've taken such an intelligent and seemingly over powered type of character, and balanced him. He has no idea how to go about getting this serum back, or how to save New york, and he's also confused about his own feelings and I love that. You could also, potentially, use Nathaniel against Elliot which could become quite interesting."
it was fun
"it has potential the first chapter has promise. David was relatable and not overpowered. He seems like an ok dad. I also didn't notice a lot of cliches."
